it's quite good. Good storytelling, also didn't found lots of mistakes, so that's a positive. As for tips, I guess I can say the story is going slowly and seems to be just a tiny bit predictable... How about putting two of those short chapters together as one? Try to make it in a way that at the end of a chapter there is some change from how the situation looked at the beginning. Best option always is to end chapter in a way that leaves the reader curious about what's gonna happen next ^^
I wanted to share my opinion, also trying to help you, author 😅 honestly, I admire people who can be persistent about thing they like and want to do (since I can't do that...)
so, in short: good job, author, keep it up! fighting!~
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Draxenia
it's quite good. Good storytelling, also didn't found lots of mistakes, so that's a positive. As for tips, I guess I can say the story is going slowly and seems to be just a tiny bit predictable... How about putting two of those short chapters together as one? Try to make it in a way that at the end of a chapter there is some change from how the situation looked at the beginning. Best option always is to end chapter in a way that leaves the reader curious about what's gonna happen next ^^
I wanted to share my opinion, also trying to help you, author 😅 honestly, I admire people who can be persistent about thing they like and want to do (since I can't do that...)
so, in short: good job, author, keep it up! fighting!~
2020-03-22
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