Good introduction kid... but yeah, you need to improve your grammar a bit though. Read more novels and newspapers if you can, that will increase your vocabulary and improve your grammar as well.
2020-10-23
2
ᗪᗩᖇK ᗩᙅᙓ
nice work jas and I liked your 1st episode
would re read it again as I am kinda busy now
but one point
'MOST POWERFUL DOMINANT RICHEST'
its not satisfying use fewer words like MOST DOMINANT MOST POWERFUL MOST RICH (this one ain't at parr with other two)
it would be more attractive as all words mean the same rich means only best in economy
other two include both economy and man power tho some may say rich invludes man power too but that's not it
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Valeriegrimreaper🦋🖤
please read my first chat story and support it
2021-10-18
1
Boss
Good introduction kid... but yeah, you need to improve your grammar a bit though. Read more novels and newspapers if you can, that will increase your vocabulary and improve your grammar as well.
2020-10-23
2
ᗪᗩᖇK ᗩᙅᙓ
nice work jas
and I liked your 1st episode
would re read it again as I am kinda busy now
but one point
'MOST POWERFUL DOMINANT RICHEST'
its not satisfying
use fewer words like
MOST DOMINANT
MOST POWERFUL
MOST RICH (this one ain't at parr with other two)
it would be more attractive
as all words mean the same
rich means only best in economy
other two include both economy and man power
tho some may say rich invludes man power too
but that's not it
2020-10-22
1