I love it. It was absolutely amazing. I love that you are really good at describing emotional pain and you were realistic about it. The pain was described so well that i cried on so many chapters. But there is room for improvement. If you don't mind my criticism I'd like to point it out.
1. You should have written more about ML's sister as she was the reason for the misunderstanding. You should have talked about her recovery from depression. Her guilt when she found out her part in all of this. And her reconciliation to the fact it wasn't entirely her fault. 2. FL and her mother should have forgiven her father and brother, thereby completely lifting the emotional baggage of them. 3. FL's father and brother should have come to terms with their mistake and move on from it. With pain should come recovery. With guilt ahould come acceptance and regret, reconciliation. As this is a book about healing. 4. You should have evaluated more on your side characters, as they had their moments that did not relate to the main characters. 5. The FL and the ML as much as they healed separately should have healed together. Conclusion: the plot is too solid and had too much context to have been a short story. You should consider turning it into a novel and publish it. But like is said it was amazing, keep it up😘😘
2025-02-23
2
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what happened to the initiator of ML FL Betrayal Love story..... ML SISTER⁉️⁉️⁉️
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BiBi
I love it. It was absolutely amazing. I love that you are really good at describing emotional pain and you were realistic about it. The pain was described so well that i cried on so many chapters. But there is room for improvement. If you don't mind my criticism I'd like to point it out.
1. You should have written more about ML's sister as she was the reason for the misunderstanding. You should have talked about her recovery from depression. Her guilt when she found out her part in all of this. And her reconciliation to the fact it wasn't entirely her fault.
2. FL and her mother should have forgiven her father and brother, thereby completely lifting the emotional baggage of them.
3. FL's father and brother should have come to terms with their mistake and move on from it. With pain should come recovery. With guilt ahould come acceptance and regret, reconciliation. As this is a book about healing.
4. You should have evaluated more on your side characters, as they had their moments that did not relate to the main characters.
5. The FL and the ML as much as they healed separately should have healed together.
Conclusion: the plot is too solid and had too much context to have been a short story. You should consider turning it into a novel and publish it. But like is said it was amazing, keep it up😘😘
2025-02-23
2
₳₴ⱨɇ₴ ₮ø đł₳₥ø₦đ₴
what happened to the initiator of ML FL Betrayal Love story..... ML SISTER⁉️⁉️⁉️
2024-11-24
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Arnima ( First Ray Of Sun🌞 )
nice story
2024-11-04
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