author your story is good but dialogue delivery is bad... you can't arrange the way story moves.. you can't arrange events of story according to plots... your chapters seems incomplete... because it's not properly arranged
2024-11-27
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Kuku～
how did conservation (quarrel) shifted to kiran,,,,,,,, from where she came in it
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author your story is good but dialogue delivery is bad... you can't arrange the way story moves.. you can't arrange events of story according to plots... your chapters seems incomplete... because it's not properly arranged
2024-11-27
1
Kuku～
how did conservation (quarrel) shifted to kiran,,,,,,,, from where she came in it
2024-08-21
6
Kuku～
is she do not know his parents????
2024-08-21
4