author, your plot is amazing, but the flow is very bad as you miss minor details like the day, when, where. Can't understand what is happening when. Like you should have mentioned, how max when to pick up ines. But you didn't mention that's why it's out of flow and due to which it's also confusing to understand the characters' personality.
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Richa Kumari
only food is nice
2024-07-01
1
Joe
kissing scene pls 💋
2024-03-07
4
Ashi.B
author, your plot is amazing, but the flow is very bad as you miss minor details like the day, when, where. Can't understand what is happening when. Like you should have mentioned, how max when to pick up ines. But you didn't mention that's why it's out of flow and due to which it's also confusing to understand the characters' personality.
2024-01-20
25