Hey author, I think you can improve the story by making it slow-paced. Like add some more troubles, experiences or characters that would make the story a little adventurous. It’s just too straight-forward like finishing a book in the table of contents 😋 I like this kind of chat-story though. Good work!
2020-08-12
8
weirdo 🙂 maybe
but it was to fast😥😥sorry for that but its to early
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abebibobu
Hey author, I think you can improve the story by making it slow-paced. Like add some more troubles, experiences or characters that would make the story a little adventurous. It’s just too straight-forward like finishing a book in the table of contents 😋 I like this kind of chat-story though. Good work!
2020-08-12
8
weirdo 🙂 maybe
but it was to fast😥😥sorry for that but its to early
2020-08-12
4
Chhez Nitesz
i love it and you also😻😽💘
2020-08-11
3