Hello, author. Your story plot is really good but there is a problem, I usually never pin point the problems for other but I really appreciate your efforts. 1. Story timeline is ancient period where king and queen used to rule but nothing is followed in the same way, how it actually was. The mc form new rules but in his own mind set but didn't keep in check that it's ancient time.
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Hello, author. Your story plot is really good but there is a problem, I usually never pin point the problems for other but I really appreciate your efforts.
1. Story timeline is ancient period where king and queen used to rule but nothing is followed in the same way, how it actually was. The mc form new rules but in his own mind set but didn't keep in check that it's ancient time.
2023-01-24
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🦋 Fairy 🦋
did he slap mc
2023-01-24
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