Author it's a good story author but I have some suggestions for u author don't take it as offence but here is my suggestions
U have skipped most of the part by sudden announcement of love and her revealed to media u write as a short story but u need to put more emotions in their characters and if it is important for story that she is successful. like that don't say in small. let her show her pride and how she when she felt humiliated and how depressive she is and how she fell in love again when she lost trust by her 1st love.
sorry if it is a bad comment but ur idea is good interesting but put your efforts in expressing it
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Godess
which comic is this
2022-05-22
1
MOON❤️
what's the comic name??
2022-04-16
2
Author it's a good story author but I have some suggestions for u author don't take it as offence but here is my suggestions
U have skipped most of the part by sudden announcement of love and her revealed to media u write as a short story but u need to put more emotions in their characters and if it is important for story that she is successful. like that don't say in small. let her show her pride and how she when she felt humiliated and how depressive she is and how she fell in love again when she lost trust by her 1st love.
sorry if it is a bad comment but ur idea is good interesting but put your efforts in expressing it
story is nice author keep on going
2022-04-10
9