I made a story and i dont know if i should publish it like it goes like this tell me if its good i need all the feedback i can get
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CHAPTER 1
INTRO
In a village ....in the middle of a "dark forest where there was no light to be seen and when there was light it was just a shadow of light with the wind blowing chills" there was a poor family. The poor family had a boy"he had brown messy hair, and was wearing a black sweater with a knitted fabric and longed sleeved and had a rough leather on it, he was white, grey saggy jeans that reached his feet, 10 year old and was 4’ 10,had Nike shoes that were white on the edges and black on the front and were high tops."and a girl"she was 16yr,had light brown hair,her hair was down, her hair reached her elbow,wearing a matching black sweater as her little brother,she was white,wearing black jeans, had brown shoes"the mom"she was 29yr,long black hair with some red highlights and was wavy ,wearing a white shirt saying moms rule,wearing white shorts that looked like short jeans, and had black shoes Nike air max and white on the borders"the dad"has blond hair, the hair was short and spiky,wearing a black shirt saying dad is the best, wearing grey jeans that was just straight and not saggy,was 27yr,wearing white shoes like the ones for church and brown eyes and a straight face with a big lips.the boys name is James the girls name is Lilly. Lily has a soft and cute face with red cheeks and brown eyes and soft lips and eyes to die for. James had a like a bad boy face that looked like he would kill someone but hard lips and normal cheeks and brown eyes. Mom had a face that made her look so young and eyes that look like a Cuban and Cuban looks.lily friend he has brown hair with light brown highlights and dead hair and his hair looked like a Korean with American eyes and light blue eyes and white cheeks and soft lips with a 6 pack that shows and a Nike air max shoes that were red and white and a red hoodie with words in bold white that says meet me in bed and saggy jeans athletic.they have been kicked out of there house in the village. so they live next to the well.with a bell in the middle of the well with a rocky border and golden shinny bell that looked like it was pyrite and a scull curved on it.