HERO! Origins
The Commander
Yu Long City bustles with life. the year is 1947.
Civilians stroll, run and drive throughout the streets. Heading to work, school or just hanging outside. Chatter and car engines, mixed with soft construction noises fill the air.
Then the sound of screams echo break through the city noise.
A civilian runs away from a street followed by a small crowd of others, running in fear. What follows is a low down villain that goes by the name, Thunder Strike, a dark grey male mongoose.
Thunder Strike is pointlessly destroying cars and property as he floats in the air carrying a duffle bag. The classic villain committing a classic crime. A small robbery is under way.
Basic Villain
THUNDER STRIKE: "Get out the way, you fucking morons!"
He yells, shocking some innocent pedestrians as he floats by, shocking and injuring a lot.
Thunder Strike continues his push through the streets causing massive damage, attempting to make a safe escape before anything can stop him. But then something echoes through the air.
Something like wind breaking stops Thunder Strike in his tracks. He looks around, now sweating bullets.
A blue blurr flashes into view punching the mongoose in the cheek sending him flying into the ground, creating the sound of a small explosion as he touches down.
Now floating where Thunder Strike use to, The Commander stands firm with a friendly smile.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Looks like your not. . . 'lightening' fast enough to dodge me!"
A collective moan of disappointment of the bad joke flows through the air from the untouched pedestrians who were unharmed.
"What are you doing Thunder? You know you're supposed to be in prison yes?"
He lands on the edge of the newly formed crater in which Thunder Strike lies.
Basic Villain
THUNDER STRIKE: "Tcch,"
He struggles to get up, his body completely out of commission from the heavy hit he received.
"Yo-you sonuva,"
He pushes himself to stand and point his open hand towards Commander and shoots a long string of lightening at him.
Commander dodges his attack with little to no issue. Seemingly faster than light, appears behind Thunder.
Thunder notices and quickly swings his arm backwards trying to strike the lumbering wolf, but Commander steps back quickly dodging the attack.
Thunder starts throwing punches and flinging lightening waves in an erratic manner, all in an attempt to put down Commander.
With ease, Commander dodges every swing and shock then gut punches Thunder.
A shock waves blows through Thunder and out his back, creating a large gust of wind.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He thinks to himself, that he may have put too much power behind that punch.
"Sorry about that,"
Pulling his fist away, Thunder Strike falls over trying to catch his breath.
With two simple hits Commander puts down a villain with ease. Then he calls in a medical team to help the injured civilians and police to arrest Thunder Strike.
The medical team brought one of Commanders fellow hero's, Dr. Meier.
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: She walks up to her colleague.
"Hey there big guy, you didn't break'em too much, didja'?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Petra! Hey! And no I didn't,"
He says while he also thinks, 'Oh I hope not,'
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "Good, good,"
She says looking around at about 20-25 injure pedestrians.
"Because I already have my hands full, don't need you adding to that. How are you?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "I'm good,"
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "How's Zula doing? And the babies?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: " Their all doing so well. Mika took her first steps yesterday!"
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "Damn, I feel like I work too much,"
She looks around once more to the injured.
"We need to make a date, I wanna see the family,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He smiles,
"You got it, I'll make the time, I do miss hanging out with you,"
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "As do I,"
She smirks a bit as she hates showing too much emotion but she and Commander are really good friends so she cracks sometimes.
"Welp, I should get to work. I'll try to stop by soon,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He nods in delight, smiling even bigger.
After their interaction, Commander turns and flies off, leaving Meier to her medical work.
He flies around patrolling the city, making sure no wrong doings are afoot.
Though he patrols he conduct cover the entire surface, the real devious deals for on under ground.
An auction for young females take place in an abandoned warehouse, deep, hiding in plain sigh of the city of Yu Long.
Many disgusting carnivorous male animals stare and ogle the women like cuts of meat. This auction was for males who crave young female meat. A fetish almost. They drool and lick their lips, and some grope themselves as they tend to. . . 'do things' to the meat before they chow down.
A man on an intercom, softly speaks to the horrid customers.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "I hope everyone is ready to start bidding,"
He softly speaks into a little microphone.
"The bidding for little Amy is starting at 12,000. A pure white bunny is hard to come by, folks."
His shameless selling of kidnapped little girls to horny and hungry men just reeks of evil.
Uncomfortable the bidding starts as the buyers bid every penny they can. Starting from 12,000 and raising.
13, 15, 16, even 20,000. The world that dwells in the darkness is a cesspit of disgusting individuals. Slavery, illegal weapons trade, gambling, even killing of each other happen in this warehouse. And it's all under watch by a singular man.
Everyone calls him Grandfather.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "SOLD! To Mr. Latchfield, be sure to give a tip!"
A guard walks up behind him and whispers; "Sir, the item could not make it. Thunder Strike was arrested. Commander stopped him".
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: His smile that he had fades.
"Fucking hate that powered asshole,"
He grips and breaks his microphone out of anger.
"That fucking loser. Stupid smile, God I hate him. I need to figure out how to stop that him"
He scratches his chin thinking on what to do.
"Do we have anyone who can take him out?"
The guard stands by and thinks to himself, not really having too much of and idea. But that conversation was quickly cut short as Mr. Latchfield, the bid winner, enters the room holding a briefcase ready to pay.
After the transaction Grandfather goes back to thinking about what he could possible do or who he could get to put down his enemy, Commander.
Commander is the stereotypical hero, with the same basic powers; Flight, super strength, ice breath, heat vision, super speed and virtually impenetrable skin. With a resume like this it's hard to find someone to take him down.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "Let me ask you,"
The guard turns to him.
"Do you know. . .the science behind Commander?"
The Science
MaZula
MaZULA: "Oh my god!"
She yells, tugging at Commanders jacket, showing he tore it along the side of the seem. She stands at a healthy 4'7" to Commander's 6'4 so she sees things he'd never know.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He looks down to what she was showing him.
"Oh, shoot, I didn't notice,"
He looks down in surprise wondering when he did that, lightly grabbing it.
MaZula
MaZULA: "You must love ruining your clothes' why do you do this to me?"
She waves her paws, floating over a small metal box.
"I already have to work with all those self absorbed scientists all day, and you want me to do more here at home?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: His ears lower a bit.
"I'm sorry, Zu-zu,"
MaZula
MaZULA: She looks up to him, then a smile stretches across her face.
"You're fine. You do a lot. I'm sure the good you do is worth it,"
She opens the small box, revealing a sewing kit.
"I can never stay mad at you, now take everything off okay?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He begins to strip down to a tanktop and underwear.
"Where are the kids?"
MaZula
MaZULA; "Their in the play room,"
Responding to him as she begins work on the tear in the suit.
He leaves his wife to her side project and heads to the second floor of his home. Jogging upstairs and opening the door to the play room, revealing his two little girls; Mika and Tena.
They both look to him and with widen eyes yell "Daddy!". Mika, still unable to fully walk begins to speed crawl over to her father as Tena runs over.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "My little babies! You adorable little bundles of joy!"
He hugs them both tightly.
"You didn't give mommy trouble when she got home from work did you?"
The oldest one, Tena, Looks at him and smiles. Replying with; "Nope!"
COMMANDER: "Good, good. Mommy works hard,"
MaZula
MaZULA: She walks into the room smiling at everyone.
"You missed daddy?"
The two babies smile and yell, "Yes".
"I always miss daddy,"
Commander smiles to his wife as they share a moment. Then after a bit of play time they all go downstairs for dinner. Tena plays with her food while Mika eats hers no problem. They all sit enjoying each other's company. MaZula goes over her work office gossip and other things. As does Commander, they both share how they both have to deal with some idiots around the work space.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Oh, guess who I saw today,"
MaZula
MaZULA: She chews and swallows the food she had in her mouth,
"Who?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Petra! She runs the M.T.F. now!"
(Medical Task Force)
MaZula
MaZULA: She looks surprised.
"Oh really? They let a woman lead a huge team like that?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Oh yeah!"
He says grabbing another mouthful of food.
"She went above and beyond and outranked everyone who tried out for the position. It was her versus 4 others and she was the best fit,"
MaZula
MaZULA: "She's gonna make it easier for woman to get better positions like that. I just wish we had more female Heros in general,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Well maybe Tena or Mika can become the next best things,"
He looks over to them smiling.
The next day we follow MaZula to her job at Riley Labs, a science facility devoted to make the world a better and more advanced place. She, herself is a highly ranked scientist. But despite her incredible intelligence, because she is a woman in 1947, she goes mostly unnoticed. Though that does not slow down her progress.
She was able to find a more affiicient fuel source. She converted water into energy for all. Though the actual science is super complicated, she made it work to better the world.
Miscellaneous Character
Scientist: walks over to MaZula's small office and peeks his head in.
"Mrs. Lankton do you believe you can do a power point for the Loopa's visit today?"
MaZula
MaZULA: "Dr. Lankton. And. . .Loopa?"
She seemed a bit confused. Dropping her bag on her desk.
"Didn't we just pass a qualification a week ago?"
Miscellaneous Character
Scientist: "Yes but, we need some more money for a big project Alex is trying to do."
MaZula
MaZULA: "He loves doing projects doesn't he? Wait no I have to work on the Energy project with Dr. Yami."
Seemingly getting a bit irritated.
"Can't anyone else do that dumb crap? An intern maybe?"
Miscellaneous Character
Scientist: "I don't trust an intern to do it. You do the best presentations. Please, please, please, please, please?"
MaZula
MaZULA: A loud and deep sigh flows out as she reluctantly nods, rubbing the bridge of her nose.
"Okay fine, fine fine. But I'm not devoting my whole day to this bologna. I have to work on my projects too,"
Miscellaneous Character
Scientist: "Of course, of course, thank you so much,"
he turns and leaves the room.
MaZula
MaZULA: She plops down at her desk and turns on her computer in an annoyed manner.
Sadly this is what all the male scientists do to her. They always swap MaZula with remedial and tedious tasks such as this because they believe certain tasks need a. . . "females touch" they say. But instead of letting that annoy her, MaZula dives into it to rid herself of the task to get back to her own personal project.
After devoting roughly 2 hours on the power point, she decides to take a short break to grab some coffee. She get up and heads to the lounge.
MaZula
MaZULA: She strolls into the lounge area and bumps right into someone.
"Off!", she quickly recovers and looks up. "Oh I'm sorry!"
She looks up to see the young scientists, Alex Anthony White.
Alex A. White
ALEX: He looks down to the small bunny. His expression emotionless and tone almost robotic.
"Oh, apologies Mrs. Lankton,"
MaZula
MaZULA: "Doctor. . . Dr. Lankton," She corrects him.
Alex A. White
ALEX: "Oh no," He replies.
"You're very right. Dr. Lankton, apologies."
MaZula
MaZULA: "Anyway, your power point for Loopa's presentation is ready, I'll email it to you,"
Alex A. White
ALEX: "Thank you, doctor. You work fast,"
He begins to examine her fully.
"Wait, Dr. Lankton? You're working on Project "E" right? With Dr. Yami?"
MaZula
MaZULA: "That's me,"
Alex A. White
ALEX: "If you ever have time I'd love to pick your brain on that, I never seen such detail and care put into a project,"
MaZula
MaZULA: "Oh," surprised, despite his robotic, almost dead like tone, she could tell he was being sincere.
"Uhmm, of course. It took years of research and trial and error,"
Alex A. White
ALEX: "Considering it's up and running, I'd say more trial than error,"
MaZula
MaZULA: She blushes, feeling super proud to hear that from one of the best scientists in the building. Being recognized for her hard work.
"Thank you, Dr. White,"
Alex nods to MaZula then walks past her heading down hall to his office. MaZula's head follows him, still surprised that she was just praised more or less. After working there for 4 years, most other scientists just give her a pat on the back or just outright don't recognize her work. But to have the best guy in there love her work makes her feel huge.
Alex A. White
ALEX: He sits at his desk dropping his messenger bag beside his seat. Turning on his computer and sips his coffee. He opens up his email and starts sifting through everything, picking certain ones to reply to.
His cellphone vibrates in his pocket.
He takes it out, the caller ID blocked.
"Hello?", he answers.
"Yes," . . .
"After noon," . . .
"Of course, I don't mind doing that,". . .
"Yes of course, but I do believe something can be done,". . .
"Of course, I'm sure I can figure something out. I'll get a friend to work with" . . .
"Yes, yes. Of course. Yes, I'll let you know soon". . .
"No problem. Good bye, Grandfather,"
He ends the call and shoves his phone back into his pocket and goes back to reading emails.
The Deals
We join our main boy, Commander as he heads out to work after dropping his kids off at school and daycare. He works with this new organization for hero's; The N.H.C., or the National Hero Association. The founder made a mistake with the acronym so don't ask.
Anyway the N.H.C. is the newly formed government funded company that works along side world leaders to help regulate hero work and gives them a nice paycheck. Working as a hero isn't anything special in terms of pay. It's more or less a regular job. Granted if you work for the N.H.C. you will get paid anywhere between 20 to 30 dollars and hour, it comes with free health care, dental and housing for you(and family).
Commander walks into the small office building and heads to the main office to his current boss, that of which is the founder of the N.H.C., Mable Caligan.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He knocks on the door and peeks in.
"Morning boss, lady"
Mable C.
MABLE: Working on 50 things at once; writing down info, signing documents and has two phones to her ears.
"Yes of course, bye-bye," hangs up one phone then before answering the second phone she looks to Commander.
"Morning!" smiling, then answers the other phone.
"After that incident yes it will be fixed. Yes yes!" She then hangs up the second phone and continues writing.
"How was your night, Trevor?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Oh yeah, it was nice," He examines all the papers, ringing phones and all the mess Mable seems to be working on but she doesn't seem to be breaking a sweat.
"Why don't you hire assistants?"
Mable C.
MABLE: "Oh no, I can handle all of this," she playfully waves her hand smiling
"Besides I love my personal touch on things,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Oh alright, well I'll leave you be, just wanted to check in on you," He grins.
Mable C.
MABLE: "Aww you're the best! Your wife is lucky she gotchu first," still signing and writing things down.
"Oh before you go," she hands him a paper.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He grabs the document and looks over it. It's a deal to for sponsorship for a protein shake.
"Commercials?"
Mable C.
MABLE: She nods as she continues to work.
"We're Finally starting to get deals for you guys!"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "This is cool but. . . a protein shake?" he makes a distasteful expression.
"I don't like. . . do this stuff"
Mable C.
MABLE: "Keep reading it,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He continues to look over the document, then his eyes widen.
"I don't have to be in a commercial! I just need to wear the patch for a month?!"
Mable C.
MABLE: "You're still endorsing it to some extent but this way you don't have to be on screen being the face of it ya know?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "You're amazing, and you them to do 500$ for this?! Holy moly!"
Mable C.
MABLE: "You know I got you. I know what you will and won't do,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "You're amazing,"
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: Walks into the room.
"Oh hey big guy. Hey Mable,"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: He turns and smiles
"Petra, good morning!"
Mable C.
MABLE: "Morning, hot stuff" continues writing as she hands Dr. Meier a paper.
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: She overlooks the paper.
"Dope, you got Victory Hospital to work with me?"
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "She is really good,"
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "No kiddin',"
She gives a little grin.
COMMANDER
COMMANDER: "Oh my goodness, you made her smile, Mable,"
Mable C.
MABLE: She looks up, needing to see Petra smile.
Dr. Meier
DR. MEIER: "Oh shut up. Thanks Mable,"
Mable C.
MABLE: "Of course!"
The two heros leave Mables office chatting as they walk down the hall passing other heros mingling amongst themselves.
The entire build is full of up and coming heros ready to make the world a better place to live. Some are being interviewed, trained and tested to becoming official heros. Big, skinny, tall short, hair and bald all work for for justice within these walls.
But just as much as good trains, evil plots.
An alley way is a current meeting place for a sinister conference. Grandfather leans in his seat in the back of a car, whilst his guards stand outside waiting for the opposing car's door to open further down the alley.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: Sipping some water as he watches through the windshield waiting.
"C'mon what's the hold up?" He raises his wrist to look at his watch.
The opposing car door finally opens. And a cream coloured female lamb steps out, holding a small bag and walks over slowly with two hired guns behind her for protection.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "Fucking finally,"
He steps out and walks to the middle of the alley way to meet the lamb.
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "Alex said he's gonna try something first before having to use his actual plan for what you wanna do,"
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: . . . He looks at her like 'what the ****'.
"Wait, wait, wait, wait, wait, wait what? Why?"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "We-well," She gets a bit nervous and pushes up her glasses as the hired men she has look directly at Grandfather.
"His original idea he had, still needs some things to be fixed. But he wants to give something right now that he believes could help for a while,"
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: He sighs annoyingly and crosses his arms.
"Okay, fine lemme see,"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: She then digs into the bad she has and hands Grandfather a small case.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: he opens the pen sized case, revealing a vile or purple liquid.
"The **** is this?"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "I-it's a Depleter," She shakes a bit.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "Deple-a what?" sounding more irritated.
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "A Depleter, it can be injected, sprayed or shot via bullet. It attacks the muscles and cause them to shut down temporarily."
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "What the **** do I do with this?"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "W-well, Commander works purely off muscle movement. If you equipped your next runner or yourself with it it can be used to bring him down to his knees making it easy for you to kill him,"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: "We even. . .gave you the. . .recipe. . ."
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "So, I pay this douchebag 1 grand for a FUCKING PEPPER SPRAY?!"
Miscellaneous Character
GUARD: "Sir, calm down,"
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: He throws down the vile and stomps it to dust.
"YOU TELL THAT FUCKER I DON'T WANT A FUCKING MUSCLE RELAXER"
Miscellaneous Character
GUARD: Points gun at Grandfather
"Sir calm down!"
Grandfather's guards brace themselves but he waves them to not engage.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "Cute," He relaxes and runs his fingers through his hair.
"Look, I don't want this okay? I want to kill him with no extra steps. Call me lazy, but so what. You tell your asshat boss, I want something that kills him with out extra steps. 'K?"
Miscellaneous Character
LAMB: shaking slightly a bit scared. She slowly nods.
GRANDFATHER
GRAND: "Mmkay." He kneels down and grab the recipe that was in the case.
"I'm keeping this,"
he turns and heads back to his car. Getting in and slamming the door.
Though he didn't get what he wanted he still works with Alex to find a way to eliminate Commander. As his plans seems to be constantly foiled by him.
But. . . what are his plans?
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