Did they break up earlier? And why didn't she recognise him if she was in a relationship with him? The story was nice but writer should have clear these matters...
Plot: 6/10 Grammar: 9/10 Combination and understanding: 8/10 Total percentage: 77
2021-09-16
1
Ayaan (MTDC: Advisor)
the story could have been mote realistic..like 6 yrs and she still doesn't know his name- although, the twist (ending) was nice. the middle part was satisfactorily written.
grammar: 8.33 (7, 9, 9) plot: 8 (8,8,8) way if writing: 7.66 (7.5,8,7.5) understanding btwn writers; 10 total score: 84.75%
2021-08-03
1
♛ℓιzαηηє࿐
ID: 0409
Grammar: 9 Punctuation: 8 Plot: 8 Way of writing: 8 Understanding between the paras: 8
In total, 82%
The story was good. But have focused more on some parts like.. what exactly happened between both of them, where and why did Alex went away and most importantly, they both were childhood sweetheart as mentioned. That means, they were from their childhood. So, their parents must have known eachother. How is it possible that she didn't know his real name.. these confusions should have been cleared in the story to make it better
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🇵🇸 Valt Aoi MTNp
Did they break up earlier? And why didn't she recognise him if she was in a relationship with him? The story was nice but writer should have clear these matters...
Plot: 6/10
Grammar: 9/10
Combination and understanding: 8/10
Total percentage: 77
2021-09-16
1
Ayaan (MTDC: Advisor)
the story could have been mote realistic..like 6 yrs and she still doesn't know his name-
although, the twist (ending) was nice.
the middle part was satisfactorily written.
grammar: 8.33 (7, 9, 9)
plot: 8 (8,8,8)
way if writing: 7.66 (7.5,8,7.5)
understanding btwn writers; 10
total score: 84.75%
2021-08-03
1
♛ℓιzαηηє࿐
ID: 0409
Grammar: 9
Punctuation: 8
Plot: 8
Way of writing: 8
Understanding between the paras: 8
In total, 82%
The story was good. But have focused more on some parts like.. what exactly happened between both of them, where and why did Alex went away and most importantly, they both were childhood sweetheart as mentioned. That means, they were from their childhood. So, their parents must have known eachother. How is it possible that she didn't know his real name.. these confusions should have been cleared in the story to make it better
2021-08-01
2