it was my mistake

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Abnormal Situation: The Awakening

A deep, resonating dhum dhum dhum echoed from beneath the ground. MC’s family flinched. The sound came from just in front of them—beneath a small, unnatural hole. The rumbling grew louder and louder… then suddenly stopped.

Silence fell.

From the depths of the hole, a grotesque head emerged—skeined like it had been stitched together, attached to a lizard-like body with monstrous wings. The creature pushed upward, and the tree that had been growing above the hole snapped free—revealing it to be fake. The creature opened its mouth and crushed the tree in a single bite.

It was the head of a lava monster.

MC’s mother, elder sister, and MC himself began crying in terror. Their father stepped forward, placing himself protectively in front of them.

The lava monster turned its blazing gaze toward MC’s father.

Scene of Destruction

The senses of every trained soldier failed—every single one of them fell dead where they stood. Blood flowed in rivers across the ground. The air stank of death. The lava monster towered over them all—its body larger than five buildings, its head the size of a truck.

Suddenly, the lava monster appeared behind MC’s father. His breath caught in his throat as he turned in shock. The monster’s body trembled and collapsed in front of MC.

And then…

Iconic Moment: Uruja Unleashed

MC's body began to glow.

Dark, ink-like uruja—a supernatural energy—began pouring out of him like liquid smoke. It writhed and coiled, mimicking the form of the lava monster. The air cracked. Time itself froze.

Everything stopped.

The Black Shadow Appears

From under MC, a black shadow emerged, rising with majesty and menace. Blue, purple, and black energy swirled from its form like fire made of nightmares. The energy seeped into the lava monster, who seemed unaware—blinded, seeing only himself.

The shadow spoke in a cold, chilling voice:

> Black Shadow: “You're just a child... and yet you dared to consume my five successes. Has fear truly vanished from your heart since you entered the human world?”

The lava monster trembled. The air around him distorted.

> Lava Monster: “My lord… I—I do not have the courage to fight you. I came only to greet the King of Mulvar, to serve him, not to destroy. I swear, I never meant to eat anyone.”

> Black Shadow: “Really? Then why did you slaughter so many humans? You could’ve shrunk yourself. Instead, you chose murder.”

> Lava Monster: “It was to offer a gift! A tribute of human souls for the new king!”

> Black Shadow: “Lies. You’ve taken innocent lives for no reason. You must suffer the consequences.”

> Lava Monster: “No! Please! I’ve killed over a thousand… I already suffer. I’ll roam the underworld for a trillion years!”

> Black Shadow: “Then double it. Two trillion years.”

> Black Shadow (shouting): “Guides! Trap this monster in endless time loops. Let his punishment begin.”

Judgment Delivered

A black hole opened—blue, purple, and black in color. Sharp, humanoid lava creatures emerged and dragged the lava monster into the vortex, screaming.

Then, the black shadow retracted its uruja, and time unfroze.

The lava monster was gone.

Aftermath: The Broken Family

MC’s family stood in shock, blinking at the empty space. The monster was gone… just like that.

MC’s mother, sister, and he himself had stopped crying. Their father collapsed to the ground, panting, a deep “auchu… auchu…” escaping his lips.

> MC’s Father: “My love… are you all right? Are the children safe?”

> MC’s Mother: “Yes, we’re fine—but Raj, your legs! You’re still bleeding! Why did you stand in front of us like that?”

> MC’s Father: “Because I had to protect you. No matter what.”

> MC’s Sister: “Mom! Dad's legs… they’re half gone! What do we do?”

> MC’s Father: “Don’t worry. I… I know a little about herbs.”

> MC’s Mother: “How?”

> MC’s Father: “I work near an herbal shop. I’ve picked up some things.”

> Deba (MC): “I’ll help you find herbs, Dad.”

> Big Sister: “Me too.”

> MC’s Father: “Good. But stay close to me.”

Revelation from the Shadow

A voice whispered near Deba’s ear. The black shadow had returned.

> Black Shadow: “Hey, kid. You think you can fatten yourself to save your father? That lava monster drained this place of all life. You’ll find no herbs for ten kilometers. It’ll take five years for nature to recover. Will you wait that long?”

> Deba: “No… but I don’t like Sneki. I never liked Sneki!”

> Black Shadow: “You don’t understand. You’re my fifth successor. It was your mistake. You ignored Sneki—and Sneki ignored you. You failed your missions. That’s why your family suffers. Your father lost a leg because of you.”

> Deba: “It wasn’t my fault! Sneki just kept sending reminders!”

> Black Shadow: “Have you forgotten I saved you from death? That I gave you a second life? You should have admitted your mistake. Bow before Sneki. Hit your head to the ground ten times or I’ll erase your soul and put someone else in your body.”

> Deba: “But… uncle… I’m your friend…”

> Black Shadow: “Friend? You’re my servant. And I’ll kill your family if you fail again.”

Deba began to tremble. Memories of his past life began flooding back. He screamed in horror.

> Black Shadow (shocked): “Wait… are those your old memories returning?!”

The black shadow quickly shot a blue light into Deba’s forehead.

> Black Shadow: “You’ll only remember what I allow. Forget the rest.”

> Deba (softly): “Yes… it was my fault. I should’ve respected Sneki. Because of me, my family suffered. I must fix it. I must apologize… I must save them.”

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