Episode 1: Special Information!!

Hello! Please move on to the next episode for the beginning of the chapter. Today I will discussing some important details that author-san has forgotten...

Author-san..your work has already has a great start..but you may have overdone the revenge part to the point that every chapter is pretty boring..She will get framed..then she will be hot-headed..then her husband is going to give her love and I think that the love part is a bit late but I'll discuss that later...and the story has lost color...

Author-san, as a critique and a frequent reader, here are the things that you completely missed and I hope you won't get mad

You were unable to follow the story mountain.

The Story Mountain consists of:

•The Beginning

•The Rising Part

•The Climax

•The Falling Action

•The Ending

Here is how I see you made your Manga

✔The Beginning

I give it a B+

Your Beginning has a great catcher..Now that Girl Power manga's are in demand you have to have a more unique background for girl power. you know what I mean? I mean..all of the girl power genre can't just be reborn and revenge..you have to come up with something unique..like She was bullied in modern times and now that she is reborned to ancient times, she is able to fight back because the original owner has the same experience of bullying like the M.C in the first place..kinda of like that..

✔The Rising Part

Your Rising Part is definitely a D-

The Rising part is the part is supposed to be the longest part and one way to elongate its episode span is by adding love parts..I noticed that the love parts was added a bit late and it gave me a weird feeling because in the past episodes she wasn't so soft infront of Sikong Jin..She was a lot firece so by adding love parts cannot only elongate it but lengthen the episodes and at the same time viewers like me who expect she doesn't show her soft side to the M.L (because in past episodes she doesn't do that) will get used to it!

Another thing that you completely missed and let me tell you this trick not only LENGTHEN the episode COMPLETELY but also to let the F.L have character is by letting it FAIL! I Know! Letting it fail?? Yes! Because Chu Xiyao is representing a human, and as a human she also fall from the traps of others!

Letting her win all the time can build a fierce reputation for her..but your episodes will get affected..because then no one dares to provoke her!! Look at "Revenge of the Fierce Princess" they have followed that pattern because (spoiler alert) one of her maids died because she got carried away from revenging and that's how stories should be! Not only letting the maid die gives her more reasons to revenge..then again episodes have been lengthened! You get what I mean? My point is don't go overboard building her fierce character..while the episodes are still short..show she has a soft side..Making mangas is about lengthening the span of episodes it's also adding that she's human too and can be a fool..Just because she is reborned she also can make a mistake, you know😉😉

Also in this part..You should add a lot of SMALL DETAILS! YES! Small Details MATTER!! They can make an entire story flip because of THAT! It can make a huge slap in the face because of a small detail. Take "Young General, Your Wife is Too Cunning"

In one episode the F.L was accused of stealing something. The F.L retaliated that she would not steal using a bag that has a hole. See? That is a small detail (hole in a bag) but it made a difference!

Another small thing that you could make is letting the antagonist fight the F.L. It could add excitement to the readers and the readers are gonna keep up to via😉😉

✔The Climax

This is the part where the table should turn

Keeping in mind that the F.L fails this part of the story is somewhat short and keep it simple. Also this part is the exciting because the truth is getting revealed and the good things happen.

(I'm not gonna rate the author on this one because author did it early and the grade is quite disappointing)

✔The Falling Action

I have nothing else to say here because author presented well and early C-

(because falling action was too early and that's a deduction)

✔The Ending

The Ending was also early and what the other readers don't know is, you guys are actually in a sequel and the sequel of Mind Reading Princess is good. Like the episodes in the sequel are much better than the earlier episodes. Quite dissatisfied there, but please don't take my opinion to heart.

One Manga that you can definitely inspire from and let me tell you I give it an A+ (in my opinion) is The Dream of Night Bloom.

The details that I was looking for was followed..

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