honestly speaking.... yes..
I like the romance between them now.. but in your description you said it's dark obsession story but I don't see any dark obsession till now... I see obsession but for some time not to the extreme one.. and it would be better... FL gain her memory but didn't forgive him.. then we could have seen some dark obsession but you cleared that important thing so early... since the story is about dark obsession it should be at least like description.. jealousy misunderstanding possessive... a new girl between them ( suppose a business partner's daughter)or a new boy( suppose FL' s new boss)... dark obsession starts with jealousy...if he get jealous he will try to cage her but she wants freedom and will justify your description of the story..or if you have any other plans.. you can work on that

I don't want to be rude... but since you asked I said...
other then that... you are great at story telling.. story is going in a good direction but need a little distraction...😉

2025-02-12

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