You know, you coukd have made Chris, the elf, have more depth. It seemed like he wasn't a challenge nor a problem at all. The fight scene was too chaotic and short. I wouldn't mind if it was a chapter or two. But, usually, fight scenes are half of the chapter's length, depending on the plot. Also, saw some firsts in this chapter! The usage of bold, and uncensored cusses (better watch that mouth lol). Overall, a good chapter.
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You know, you coukd have made Chris, the elf, have more depth. It seemed like he wasn't a challenge nor a problem at all. The fight scene was too chaotic and short. I wouldn't mind if it was a chapter or two. But, usually, fight scenes are half of the chapter's length, depending on the plot. Also, saw some firsts in this chapter! The usage of bold, and uncensored cusses (better watch that mouth lol). Overall, a good chapter.
2021-12-02
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